Pobby and Dingan

Dingan is a girl with blue eyes, that is what Kellyanne said. Her eyes might be like a spring moon which is bent.I think she must be beautiful with straight golden hair,but not long because dingan in my vision is a cute  

Lively girl. She is lively and like going everywhere so that is why caused Kellyanne thought she lost in claim. She has a heart of exploring. Kellyanne also said Dingan wearing a fancy opal, I imagined it is blue like a ocean color. It is match with her eyes. Her has a skinny body thus she could run fast. Dingan enjoyed swing. If she were fat, I don't think she would enjoy this. And she spoke English but not Australian, so she was possibly has a feeling of Britain that lively with elegant.  

Pobby I think he is a cool boy but not outgoing. He is a shy boy. He has a brown hair and dark skin. These characteristic shows he was a composed and mature boy. He was not like Dingan who was so lively but he is super mellow. And based on my imagination he should be a strong and tough boy who can easily protect Dingan. 

 

Words

claim
Mum asked one night when she’d got back from her job on the checkout at Khan’s and me and Dad were relaxing after a hard afternoon’s work out at the claim.
None
A place with metals owned by someone

wobbling
The noise of a car drove into our ears and a four-wheel-drive police jeep came wobbling down the creamy red track that leads to our claim.
None
Shaking

startled
Verb
My dad turned around, startled.
Shocked

figment
None
I walked over to where Pobby was supposed to be sitting and punched the air and kicked the air in the head to show Kellyanne that Pobby was a figment of her imaginings.
The unreal thing

rummaged
Verb
Looking for
He rummaged through piles of rocks

ute
I slammed the door of the ute in Dingan’s face
None
Small truck

crackpot
Strange person
None
It made you want to be sick all over the place. Lightning Ridge was full of flaming crackpots as far as I could see.

Mello Yello
None
Drink
I said,hiding my anger in a swig from my can of Mello Yellow.

Mates
n.
People who work or live with you. “I still say Kellyanne could do with some real-live mates,”

Opal
None
A valuable stone. "My dad would come back from the opal mines covered in dust, his beard like the back end of a dog that’s shat all over its tail."

Fairdinkum
 n
. Australian idiom for "Are you sure?". “Fairdinkum?”

Imaginary:
adj.
existing only in your mind or imagination. "but I wasn’t crazy enough to talk to imaginary friends, I’ll tell you that for nothing."

Grub:
none
 food. "She said they were quieter and better behaved than me and deserved the grub."

Fossilized:
 verb
.Become stone. "There’s rumours going that Lucky Jes has taken out a million-dollar stone and a fossilized mammoth tooth with sun-flash in it."

Mammoth:
 none
 An old animal liked elephant which lived in the ancient time. "There’s rumours going that Lucky Jes has taken out a million-dollar stone and a fossilized mammoth tooth with sun-flash in it."

Are Pobby and Dingan real?

   Pobby and Dingan are two people who Kellyanne loved, but I think they are not real. In my opinion they are just Kellyanne's spiritual friends. There are several evidences showing my thesis.
    First the father thought Kellyanne was bored when Kellyanne asked where is Pobby and Dingan. If it is real, as a father he should be very patiently help Kellyanne. Oppositely, he doesn't care about this. This shows Pobby and Dingan are not real people. Second, his dad was shocked when he knows his daughter was playing with two non-existence friends.  " where is my little girl?” Dad asked. “Outside playing with some friends,” said my mum, fixing my dad a look straight between the eyes. “Pobby and Dingan?” “Yup.” My dad sighed. “Jesus! That girl’s round the twist,” he said. " I think his dad got shocked because he cannot believe how can Kellyanne played with them. That is also why the mom answered the father " No she isn't ,she is just different."

Favorite character Once on the Island

          My favorite character in Once On the island is Ti-moun. She didn't dress fancy but just because of this, it can shows she is a pleasant. She is a kind girl who love to save people even she met him first time. Second I like her personality that she can do everything for the person she loves. It means she is a confident girl, she doesn't afraid to express her love. Oppositely she is a lively girl, so I am pretty sure her lover will in a happy mood everyday. Ti-moune this character is my personal ideal lover.

Once on the Island

   Friday night, I went to Black Box to see a romantic drama called Once On The Island. We are required to go and I also wanted to see because I was curious. Before I watched this show, I knew there are two members of English class working in drama. They were min who played clarinet and Yichen who drew the background. When I entered into gym I was appreaciated that everything was arranged in a good order. There were some people selling chips and some people were sending brief introduction.
   There were three kinds of groups in this world, pleasant, rich people and gods( love, water, earth and death). Story began on an island, there was a couple found a orphan, they gave her a name--Ti moune. She was a kind girl. After so many years, she grew up. One day she met a rich man lying on the ground that almost died. I think it is so clever to let audience know he is a rich man because rich man wearing a white blazer which is totally different with the pleasant. She wanted to save him, so she prayed. Death god came here and said: “his life is mine now.”, but Ti-moune prayed so honestly. Then Love god came and saved that man. They fall in love. However the ending is not happy. The rich man thought their background were totally different, so he married with a rich girl. Ti- moune was so sad about it. She didn't eat and sleep for many days. Unfortunately Ti- moune dead. And gods made her become a tree which could live forever.
   This is a better story than Peter Pan because I didn't understand Peter Pan. Once on the Island is easy to know what happened. I was moved by this sad romantic story, and I felt Daniel was worldly, meanwhile I fealt deep regret about Ti-moune’s death. This story reflects a real fact in nowadays that some true romances are often killed by people’s background. People find lover are not just based on feeling but also money, appearance and rank.

Visiting to Writing center

   This is my second time visiting Writing Center. However this time, I felt I have so many problems to solve, I brought missions to Writing Center. Before I enter Writing Center, I had already have three things ready to fix.
   The first thing is always grammar mistake. I forgot to put some preposition between words that makes my sentences are not well organized. That is the easiest problem to solve but also it is important because let readers to understand is basic. I remember my last time,I mentioned I have to try to avoid grammar mistake. I still have a long way to go. The second thing I have prove is about quotes, I found I lacked quotes in my paper when I was reading. I just cannot find perfect quotes or I didn't find a good place to put in. The teacher in Writing center suggested me to put some quotes in as well. I think quotes’s function are gathering evidences for supporting thesis. That helps me to build my essay’s structure well. Another thing about quotes is the form, for example writing author name and page number. For the last one, I had been worried for many days until I came to Writing Center. It is about structure. I felt my essay was unorganized,but the teacher said it is fine. She really gave me courage and confidence.
     There is something interesting for this visiting. Last time she just helped me to fix some problems on the paper. However this time, she lead us to think about something that is critical. It is a kind of way expanding writing. She asks me to think about why children ducks follow their mom in the pond, why wild goose fly in team and why wolves hunt together? I said they could do things better because there are more than one particle, they are able to communicate each other which called teamwork. After I answered her question I got the her main point that communication is important in life, it is a smart way to learn things from others.
     In general, it is helpful. She gave me confidence to countinue writing. I like the way she helped me that focus on critical thinking more.

Reflection

In general it is a hard essay. First it requires too many words, so I have to think about many sides to write. In these sentences, there might be some sentences that are useless or it doesn't matter if they are not exist. It makes this essay's structure not very organized. I think the first thing I have to do better is making thesis stronger. It is confused if it is not organized. Therefore I have to put more words explaining my thesis in the introduction paragraph and the conclusion paragraph.  Second thing is what we focused on the most which is analysis. I remember when I last year. We usually wrote what  actually happened in the book. We did not have to include our opinions. However this essay gave me a big challenge. I found there are 60 percent that writing summary and 40 percent that writing analysis. In my opinion, a good essay has to be equal  amount of summary and analysis. That is my weakness. I used to write a long paragraph of summary, and it lost its balance. For avoiding this, I fixed it that I wrote many analysis. I feel analysis is just  my responding to this book, then I feel more free to write. And my strength is opinion that I think there are many evidences to support my thesis.