Favorite character Once on the Island

          My favorite character in Once On the island is Ti-moun. She didn't dress fancy but just because of this, it can shows she is a pleasant. She is a kind girl who love to save people even she met him first time. Second I like her personality that she can do everything for the person she loves. It means she is a confident girl, she doesn't afraid to express her love. Oppositely she is a lively girl, so I am pretty sure her lover will in a happy mood everyday. Ti-moune this character is my personal ideal lover.

Once on the Island

   Friday night, I went to Black Box to see a romantic drama called Once On The Island. We are required to go and I also wanted to see because I was curious. Before I watched this show, I knew there are two members of English class working in drama. They were min who played clarinet and Yichen who drew the background. When I entered into gym I was appreaciated that everything was arranged in a good order. There were some people selling chips and some people were sending brief introduction.
   There were three kinds of groups in this world, pleasant, rich people and gods( love, water, earth and death). Story began on an island, there was a couple found a orphan, they gave her a name--Ti moune. She was a kind girl. After so many years, she grew up. One day she met a rich man lying on the ground that almost died. I think it is so clever to let audience know he is a rich man because rich man wearing a white blazer which is totally different with the pleasant. She wanted to save him, so she prayed. Death god came here and said: “his life is mine now.”, but Ti-moune prayed so honestly. Then Love god came and saved that man. They fall in love. However the ending is not happy. The rich man thought their background were totally different, so he married with a rich girl. Ti- moune was so sad about it. She didn't eat and sleep for many days. Unfortunately Ti- moune dead. And gods made her become a tree which could live forever.
   This is a better story than Peter Pan because I didn't understand Peter Pan. Once on the Island is easy to know what happened. I was moved by this sad romantic story, and I felt Daniel was worldly, meanwhile I fealt deep regret about Ti-moune’s death. This story reflects a real fact in nowadays that some true romances are often killed by people’s background. People find lover are not just based on feeling but also money, appearance and rank.

Visiting to Writing center

   This is my second time visiting Writing Center. However this time, I felt I have so many problems to solve, I brought missions to Writing Center. Before I enter Writing Center, I had already have three things ready to fix.
   The first thing is always grammar mistake. I forgot to put some preposition between words that makes my sentences are not well organized. That is the easiest problem to solve but also it is important because let readers to understand is basic. I remember my last time,I mentioned I have to try to avoid grammar mistake. I still have a long way to go. The second thing I have prove is about quotes, I found I lacked quotes in my paper when I was reading. I just cannot find perfect quotes or I didn't find a good place to put in. The teacher in Writing center suggested me to put some quotes in as well. I think quotes’s function are gathering evidences for supporting thesis. That helps me to build my essay’s structure well. Another thing about quotes is the form, for example writing author name and page number. For the last one, I had been worried for many days until I came to Writing Center. It is about structure. I felt my essay was unorganized,but the teacher said it is fine. She really gave me courage and confidence.
     There is something interesting for this visiting. Last time she just helped me to fix some problems on the paper. However this time, she lead us to think about something that is critical. It is a kind of way expanding writing. She asks me to think about why children ducks follow their mom in the pond, why wild goose fly in team and why wolves hunt together? I said they could do things better because there are more than one particle, they are able to communicate each other which called teamwork. After I answered her question I got the her main point that communication is important in life, it is a smart way to learn things from others.
     In general, it is helpful. She gave me confidence to countinue writing. I like the way she helped me that focus on critical thinking more.

Reflection

In general it is a hard essay. First it requires too many words, so I have to think about many sides to write. In these sentences, there might be some sentences that are useless or it doesn't matter if they are not exist. It makes this essay's structure not very organized. I think the first thing I have to do better is making thesis stronger. It is confused if it is not organized. Therefore I have to put more words explaining my thesis in the introduction paragraph and the conclusion paragraph.  Second thing is what we focused on the most which is analysis. I remember when I last year. We usually wrote what  actually happened in the book. We did not have to include our opinions. However this essay gave me a big challenge. I found there are 60 percent that writing summary and 40 percent that writing analysis. In my opinion, a good essay has to be equal  amount of summary and analysis. That is my weakness. I used to write a long paragraph of summary, and it lost its balance. For avoiding this, I fixed it that I wrote many analysis. I feel analysis is just  my responding to this book, then I feel more free to write. And my strength is opinion that I think there are many evidences to support my thesis.

My favorite sentence

In my opinion man can overcome thing, in this period he might feel tired and want to give up. However they need someone to lead them out.

I like this sentence because it tells only a man sometimes can't overcome, but he needs a prop to support him and give advice to him.

First draft

                   
                                                               Mature
     People always saying a boy grows up to a man when he becomes mature, but most of the people doesn't know what is a mature man or what things make them be mature. In my opinion man can overcome something. In this period, he might feel tired and wants to give up. However they need some one to lead them out. That is fine as long as he beats the difficulty.
    < Me and You> telling a story a boy called Lorenzo who had some problems to communicate with others, and a doctor said he was lacking interests or cares for others except his mom and dad. In his world there were only a few people. However when he was really cares or loves someone, he would be very angry when one tries to hurt them. One day two men crushed on his mom’s car and they said many bad words to his mom. He felt angry and wanted to kill them. There was a skiing trip but he did not want to join in, otherwise he did not want to his mom know too he had concerned. So he just lie to his mom, but actually he just stayed in the cellar to avoid this activity. In a morning he heard someone knocked the door, he went there to check who it was and found it was his half-sister Olivia. At first Lorenzo did not care about this sister or can even say dislike, so their relationship was not that good. Day by day, as they lived together they began to know each other. Lorenzo found Olivia took drugs and her situation was bad, she kept vomiting and shaking. For making her better Lorenzo went to hospital to steal some medicines for his sister. One day when Lorenzo wake up, he found Olivia was gone and left a letter. “ Thanks for helping me, I will stop taking drugs and we will see each other again.”  After ten years Lorenzo went to see Olivia last time. Olivia was dead by taking too much drugs.
    I think Lorenzo had a really big change that affected by Olivia. And this is a good change for him. Everyone has their period that lost when they were teenagers, once you break out of this perplexed time, you would be mature. In my opinion, there are two factors helping you. First one is external factor which in most of the situations are human. For example Olivia is an external factor for Lorenzo. This external factor is really essential, because this person has his own thoughts that can teach. Olivia’s accomplishment is opening Lorenzo’s heart. So Lorenzo was able to react to this world. There is a good saying “ everyone is your teacher” proves external factor is really important. Another factor is inside factor, that means itself has to do much efforts. At the beginning it is hard or it can be called suffering. Lorenzo was forced to live with Olivia, and he feels uncomfortable living with her. However when someone really cares about one person, he might to do anything for this person. He might be afraid of doing this stuff, but when he thinks about the person he cares, he has no more fear. Changing a person only need external factor is not enough because itself has to put efforts to change, and all the power comes from the person he cherishes.
   The Karate Kid is about a Kung Fu boy named Park. He was immigrated from America to China. At first he did not know how to communicate with others. Students in school spoke Chinese and he was not good at it. And it was also about culture, their way of making friends were different. Park was outgoing, so he enjoyed talking to anbody. However there was a group of students who practiced Kung Fu did not like his style. So their leader- Wang just announced I would punch you because you talked to the girl I like. Park was unlucky, he was beat up by Wang. After this thing happened he met a water tube worker, but he was a master of Kung Fu. Mr.han decided to teach Park Kung Fu so he could be able to protect himself. And they also agreed on one day Wang and Park would have a competition.In the beginning, Park was easily to get angry when he practiced because he usually imagined when he punches Wang. Mr.han asked him to control his motion. Day by day park was turning into a mature boy. At last he won the competition.
    In this time, Park changed a lot in two sides which were body and his emotion. I think being mature shows on many ways,the biggest one is trying to control emotion. Sometimes it is easily to lose discretion when you are angry, then it is possible to make things worse. So a real man don't act on impulse, they always control their emotion. I think that is what Mr.han wanted to teach Park. A meaningful sentence that Mr.han said to Park “ Kung Fu is not about punching but controlling emotion” shows Mr.han wanted Park being an undefeated man that nothing can hold him back. Man can beat anything if he has a strong heart.

The novel Me And You and the film Eternal Sunshine of the spotless Mind both telling stories people's changing. They own hope in their minds to change to a better future.

The novel Me And You and the film The Karate Kid both telling stories that teenagers changing personalities to earn the hope.

outline

Thesis statement: Me And You and The Karate Kid are similar because they both tell a story that how someone changed or afftected a boy. And these affects made them to learn how to be more mature.

Outline:
First paragraph: telling what happened in Me and You. Trying to write detailed ( lorenzo’s problem and his relationship with his sister )so it can be easily compare with The Karate Kid.

Topic sentence:  Lorenzo’s sister and Lorenzo had their own fantastic experience in basement and they both learned something from each other.

Second paragraph: Analyse what sides did Lorenzo changed.

Topic sentence: Lorenzo changed more mature than before.

Third paragraph: describing The Karate Kid’s plot. He is a boy immigrate to China but bullied by others. For protecting himselves he began to learn Kung Fu.

Topic sentence: He grow up that he knew Kung Fu is not only about paunches but trying to master himself.

Fourth Paragraph: Analyse how did his Kung Fu teacher affect on him.

Topic Sentence: When ones knows how to master himself, it is the time he becames mature.

Fifth Paragraph: Compare these two charcater that what are similar what are different.

Topic sentence: Teenagers have to have someone to help them grow up.

Snow days

Snow days

Snow days were shorter than other days.
I slept over the whole mornings,
So I relaxed well.

Snow days were dirtier than other days.
I did snow angel,
So I got snow on my body

Snow days were whiter than other days.
There were snow everywhere outside and there were some snowflakes falling down.
So that was a beautiful vision.

Anyway snow days had so much fun and I relaxed well,
So I loved snow days.

film

    The Karate Kid is a good example that shows two people’s relationship. And it was used to be my favourite movie because there was a main character same age with me at that time. He was my idol, I admired his hardworking. There are many chinese knew this film, this film was taken in Beijing which was my hometown. So I felt very familiar.
   Parker was a boy who immigrated from America to China, At first he felt neverous because everything was new to him. He did not have any friends, but there was a girl called MeiYing became his friend. In this school, a group of people who praticed Kung Fu did not like Parker. The reason is simple, the leader of this group liked MeiYing, He didn’t want anyone try to get closer to MeiYing. No doubt this leader fought with Parker, they were not actually fighting. Park was so weak to fight with a boy who learned Kung Fu. Then a master of Kung Fu called Mr.han appeared. He wanted to teach Park Kung Fu then Park would get no more bully. In fact trainning was hard, Parker practiced everydays. As days passes, his body was getting stronger and stronger. Not only his body, Mr.han also taught him that Kung Fu is not only about paunches but trying to control one’s emotion. At last Parker won the competition with that leader. r
   Mr.han really affected on him that teaching him many things. And Parker got stronger and stronger whether body or emotion. He became more mature.

Three movies

Forrest gump
A boy who had a talent for sports but not clever was affected by his mom. His mom really helped him a lot in his lifetime.

The Karate Kid
A boy immigrated from America was often bullied by others in China. A Kung Fu teacher taught him how to protect himself and how to be tough.

The boy in the striped pajamas
A boy whose father is an officer in Germany army. One day he found a Jewish  boy who suffered in concentration camp. This Jewish boy let this boy knew their situations.